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@fatevdestiny, jojo, thank you both for the kind comments. @SE4NICK, I liked your piece of writing, if you've got more, do share with us! Cheers!
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Posted: 2007-11-06 06:11:00
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GOOD work deluded !
I will share some more of my work and change the thread nowish...
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Posted: 2007-11-06 07:40:36
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Ok here is one of many others I have written.
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Untitled - Nick D
I press on through the soothing darkness, alone.
With every step, I grow colder.
I pull my bloodstained blazer even tighter around me, keeping one hand on the bullet wound.
I soon hope to find a way out of this mess of a world !
Trying to forget you, I remember more.
I now realise what a bitch you were.
The other bastards were fearful, cowering when you passed.
I, was the one.
I would have killed for you.
I always stood through it all.
NOW !
It has come to this,
I can walk no further, my clothes now drenched in blood.
I take one last look at the stars as EVERYTHING drifts further and further away.
I remove the cross from my neck,
throwing it with the last ounce of my strength.
It lands, glistening RED, in the snow.
I then collapse into the crimson pool of blood and snow beneath me.
I hear the WHISPER OF SIN creeping up on me...
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Posted: 2007-11-06 07:47:02
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@SE4NICK, nice one! Thanks for taking my suggestion about making this thread one where we can all contribute. I hope there'll be others willing to put up their works here. Don't be shy! I know it's not easy to put one's works up for fear of criticism, but I think it's a good way to improve. I also hope everyone won't be too critical of the contributors as I'm sure we've all put a fair amount of thought into our works and they mean something to us.
Here's the first piece I wrote many years ago:
Silence.
It is the most precious of things.
It is the most melodious song.
Silence speaks without a word,
Yet it says a thousand.
Silence is tranquil,
Yet it stings like a resounding echo.
Reverberating through itself,
Making itself heard without any effort.
By: deluded@Esato
By the way, Nick, I realised both your pieces are quite dark, are they usually like that? Mine are too, most of the time, I've realised.
[ This Message was edited by: deluded on 2007-11-08 16:39 ]
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Posted: 2007-11-06 14:29:00
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All my pieces are dark.........never written a happy piece in my life lol...
Anyway ur last one was really really good, even though it was soo short it was wonderfull and conveyed sooo much !
Still lokking for sort of a "poem" hosting thing explanation in first post..
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Posted: 2007-11-06 21:50:36
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brilliant
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Posted: 2007-11-06 21:54:41
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what if we all signed up for blogger then posted the poems, stories etc on a blog then in the main posts i could have links to the storie blogs and chatergorize them...???
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Posted: 2007-11-07 05:47:58
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I and sirhackalot may have a solution if we work together, soo bear with us whilst we set up an ftp server...
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Posted: 2007-11-07 08:22:45
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Thanks for the kind comments guys, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm hoping there'll be more contributions. I've still got a couple more, but some are quite raw and unpolished.
@SE4NICK, I really appreciate the effort that you and sirhackalot are putting in to find a suitable outlet for us. I am a little concerned about plagiarism, to be honest. I know I'm not all that good at this stuff, but I really do hope due credit would be given if anyone does take stuff from this thread.
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Posted: 2007-11-07 18:38:22
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My thoughts exactly !
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Posted: 2007-11-07 21:41:54
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