General discussions : Non mobile discussion : heres the first couple of scenes in my script
>
New Topic
>
Reply<
Esato Forum Index
>
General discussions >
Non mobile discussion
> heres the first couple of scenes in my script
Bookmark topic
because they stumble across the where abouts of the unknown desert facility, the people at the unknown dester facility keep them there.
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 08:18:06
Edit :
Quote
they find out that the unknown desert facility are secretly harvesting killer plants....that kill people too.
now they have to save the world before the evil professor bunnypenny lets these plants loose on everybody.
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 08:22:55
Edit :
Quote
Yeah, there are chained dogs and they see a man being tortured, he is naked and all his finger nails are gone. He is tied to a chair. They also see a modern laboratory with ppl in white lab coats doing their work. There is also a huge tank filled with boiling a liquid like acid. Four or five huge bullet tankers in white with the word "your friendly fertilised" written on it. But somehow they dont believe it.
This message was posted from a K500
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 08:23:43
Edit :
Quote
this is starting to sound pretty good.
a comedy/take over the world with super plants/thriller/stoner/teen movie
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 08:28:46
Edit :
Quote
If you need visualfx, contact me
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 14:42:27
Edit :
Quote
if u need groupies contact me
--
Posted: 2005-03-29 15:19:43
Edit :
Quote
@billy
i doubt a 50 dollar a week (pocket money from mummmy) budget film could afford VFX
@djcreamz
hmmmm.....
--
Posted: 2005-03-30 12:16:19
Edit :
Quote
ok... scrap that first idea, it sucked, well it was alrite but my next one is better.... i hope
its about 3 best mates and their adventures in a crazy 4 day long weekend. this just one scene i wrote for it, hope yall like it
here goes.
FADE IN:
INT. HUNGRY JACKS – NIGHT
An almost deserted hungry jack’s restaurant late at night, everyone is almost ready to head home and there is cheesy juke box music playing over the soft chitchat of the employees.
EXT. HUNGRY JACKS – NIGHT
Some unknown shadows are slowly heading towards the entrance to the restaurant, as the camera follows into the light we see that they are three college kids. We cant see their faces but they look young from behind.
INT. HUNGRY JACKS – NIGHT
The three figures enter the restaurant and two of them immediately advance towards the counter. The other heads towards the bathroom. They are non threatening looking and are stumbling around like stoned idiots, laughing at the most stupid things. One of the boys sticks 2 straws up his nose and…
STONER BOY 1
HEY DUDE, check it out. Im john Howard’s older brother.
He laughs infectiously but the other boy is puzzled.
STONER BOY 2
Wait wait, who the f*cks that? That doesn’t make sense.
STONER BOY 1
Who cares! He must have been an *sshole to stick straws up his f*ckin nose.
At this point he is sticking straws into every single orifice on is face. He starts laughing like a hyena and walks up to the counter to join the other boy.
STONER BOY 1 (CONT’D)
I look like a f**kin pine cone monster.
STONER BOY 2
Dude, don’t be a gay rod.
They both all of a sudden get serious and look at the girl behind the counter.
HUNGRY JACKS GIRL
What can I get you boys?
STONER BOY 3 (Off screen)
N*PPLE BURGERS!!
All three people look in the direction of the toilet as we see the third stoner boy walk out with a spaced out look on his face
STONER BOY 3 (CONT’D)
And boob (pause)
Uhhh Fries! (Beat)
What you can get is a decent cleaner for the toilet in there I mean holy sh*t, sh*t like that needs to be studied or archived or f*ck knows what. It’s nasty!
STONER BOY 1
Hey dude, let’s go on the f*cken playground HAHA!
STONER BOY 3
F*CK YEAH MAN, that’s the best idea in the world, you should be at M-I-T or somethin.
Both boys head towards the playground mumbling stupid comments to each other and then laughing like idiots. The other boy is still deciding what he wants when we hear in the background.
STONER BOY 1 (Off Screen)
Looks at me! Im john Howard’s older brother in law. (Pause)
Holy sh*t dude this fart stinks HAHA
STONER BOY 3 (Off screen)
Oh man dude go take a sh*t or somethin aye, and get those f*cken straws out of your head.
The boy and the girl at the counter just shake their heads.
STONER BOY 2
(Speeds up)
Yeah ill just get three whoppers, hold the pickles in two of them, three large fries, one large strawberry milkshake, one large fanta, one medium orange juice, three chocolate sundaes and your phone number.
They exchange cheeky smiles and we can see the chemistry between them.
STONER BOY 3(Off Screen)
OH MY GOD, CHECK IT OUT DUDE
EXT. HUNGRY JACKS, PLAYGROUND – NIGHT
One of the stoner boys comes running up to the other, nearly knocking both of them over.
STONER BOY 3
I found a f*cken dollar.
STONER BOY 1
Dude, we gotta buy some cookies with that man, I mean I know you wanna save up and sh*t, but come on. Its cookies. Take one for the team bro.
INT. HUNGRY JACKS RESTAURANT - NIGHT
HUNGRY JACKS GIRL
So what are you boys up to tonight?
STONER BOY 2
Oh you know, the usual, just hangin out back at my place. You’re welcome to come if you want.
Still a cheesy grin on both of their faces
HUNGRY JACKS GIRL
I might just do that
She hands him a piece of paper
HUNGRY JACKS GIRL (CONT’D)
Here’s my number, give me a call later on.
She gives him their food just as the other boys walk in. they both have stupid but attempted serious looks on their faces, one of them still has a straw sticking in his ear.
STONER BOY 3
(Whispers)
Dude, ah you still got a straw in your ear.
The other boy just ignores him and goes up to get the food. The first boy exchanges one last cheesy look with the girl at the counter as very cheesy music comes on from the juke box, everything is in slow motion as he walks backwards, still staring and smiling, then…
STONER BOY 1
F*CK DUDE, you coulda told me I still had a straw in my ear, that’s f*cken embarrassing man, I think I had a pretty good chance with that chick
He starts ad libbing and complaining as they exit the restaurant.
what do you reckon, too much swearing??
--
Posted: 2005-03-30 13:14:53
Edit :
Quote
lol u brightened up my day boy, it is really funny, and its starting to look like the kinda film i would enjoy, cant wait to read more, and more imortantly, see the actual film..
The groupies thing still stands, also if you want the waitress in drag im the man to fill that role
--
Posted: 2005-03-30 13:55:53
Edit :
Quote
glad you like it mate, ill try to write some more over the next few weeks, but ive got lots of homework
--
Posted: 2005-03-30 14:13:32
Edit :
Quote
New Topic
Reply
