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ozzie kids and their voyage into manhood over a 5 day long weekend
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Posted: 2005-03-31 12:49:51
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i was going to aussie land in july with my misses for 3 months was gonna stay with her uncle but his wife just filled for divorce so it looks likes hes comming home
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Posted: 2005-03-31 12:55:05
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On 2005-03-31 12:49:47, DJcreamz wrote:
ur comments are a little harsh and a bit beyond constructive if i was your mother id give you a thick ear
beyond constuctive?? He asked for feedback, so I gave some.
just tawt it needed some spicing up...
thick ear??? sounds like u got a thick lip!!!!!!
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Posted: 2005-03-31 13:25:03
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nickorooster Posts: > 500
Davo, that scene with the bike etc, would be hilarious. If I saw that in a movie, I'd be laughing for quite a while
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Only thing tho, reduce the number of "Dudes", 'cause I got really sick of them in "Dude where's my car" etc. Find another way to call someone. Oh and that jubilant Metal Mullisha sign, ditch that, and just have him stand up in the wagon and yell etc, and then have the wagon slip out from under him...
Looking really good. Keep it up!
Nick
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Posted: 2005-03-31 13:31:18
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i just read through it and there are quite alot of dudes in it aye.
@nick
it is a funny scene isnt it, i wrote it and then reread it and was wettin myself, thats why i didnt want to post this particular scene publically because its good material, now some bloody hollywood guy like stephen speilberg or sumthin is gonna use my material. oh well.
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Posted: 2005-03-31 15:11:50
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@davo: i think you took my question a little too seriously
@nicko: actually there are two, one
here, the other - the one i was referring to -
here and
here (you can see a picture
here).
@786: crash bandicoot is like, also ps2, xbox and gc.
maybe you could use "maaaaaate" instead of "dude", and i like nicko's idea of the wagon slipping out from underneath.
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Posted: 2005-04-01 01:51:09
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yeh ill think about it aye,
im not going to write much lately as ive got no ideas atm
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Posted: 2005-04-01 10:08:35
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